Sighing One Charred Name [Alt. Vers.]

On By DanicaPicheIn Creative Writing

Ballads soaked in black
Bleed through drywall cracks

Floor tiles curled and crushed
Indifference layered rust

Mazes of iron pipes
Map unrelenting nights

Dusty petals hidden
Ashes trail unbidden

Shimmer beyond claim
Sighing one charred name

Soothing your scorched skin
Redemption’s violin

 

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Note:  This alternate version of Sighing One Charred Name was inspired by Rich Kamerman’s comments on the original.  You can find Rich revisiting and discussing his extensive music collection at KamerTunesBlog.

 

 

 

3 thoughts on “Sighing One Charred Name [Alt. Vers.]”

  1. aFrankAngle

    Works … and still creepy. 😉

    Off topic … but a reminder to you of my holiday party this weekend. It’s your first, so it’s quite the festive event … and your readers are welcome!

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    1. Haha…well I’m glad it works 🙂 Thanks always for reading and your feedback, Frank, I really appreciate it.

      Great news about your holiday party! Thank you for the reminder and invitation to everyone. I hope that everyone reading stops by to check it out. It’s sure to be a lot of fun!

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