Your Light Coursing Through My Veins

On May 6, 2017May 6, 2017 By DanicaPicheIn Creative Writing

Trailing sun-bleached hairs
Tracing hidden freckles

Inhaling your breath
Sinking into your scent

Your light coursing
Through my veins

Waking with a start
Fumbling for the receiver

Aching to crawl through the phone
And curl into you

18 thoughts on “Your Light Coursing Through My Veins”

Robert Matthew Goldstein

Your light coursing through my veins. Great line!

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May 6, 2017 at 9:58 pm Reply
1. DanicaPiche
  
  Thank you, Rob! I’m delighted that you like it.
  
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  May 6, 2017 at 11:01 pm Reply
  1. Robert Matthew Goldstein
    
    It’s a deeply spiritual moment…
    
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    May 6, 2017 at 11:28 pm Reply
    1. DanicaPiche
      
      Yes….
      
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      May 7, 2017 at 12:39 am Reply
melisdvash

I really love this.

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May 7, 2017 at 5:49 am Reply
1. DanicaPiche
  
  I’m so glad! Thank you. 🙂
  
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  May 7, 2017 at 6:55 am Reply
J.

That “your light coursing through my veins” line is brilliant. As RMG says, it’s very spiritual. Wonderful stuff.

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May 7, 2017 at 9:26 am Reply
1. DanicaPiche
  
  Thanks so much! I’m delighted you like it.
  
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  May 7, 2017 at 9:45 am Reply
KamerTunesBlog (by Rich Kamerman)

Beautiful work, Danica. I especially like the ending, which surprised me. I assumed they were in the same room.

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May 7, 2017 at 10:51 am Reply
1. DanicaPiche
  
  Thank you, Rich! I’m happy that the ending surprised you, it’s what I hoped the reader would experience.
  
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  May 7, 2017 at 11:00 am Reply
kevin

I once had a long distance relationship. I crawled through the phone many times. Beautiful last line.

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May 7, 2017 at 1:33 pm Reply
1. DanicaPiche
  
  I read somewhere that you haven’t lived until you’re meeting your love at the airport. I wanted to capture something similar here. Thanks, I’m very happy you like it.
  
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  May 7, 2017 at 2:30 pm Reply
Looking for the Light

Danica
I want to feel the desire of needing, wanting to crawl thru the phone line. Sounds sexy. I could handle more to this story, of course you may make quite a stir with reader excitement.
M

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May 8, 2017 at 1:05 am Reply
1. DanicaPiche
  
  It’s a wonderful kind of pain, isn’t it, M? Maybe there’s another installment….
  
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  May 8, 2017 at 8:46 am Reply
  1. Looking for the Light
    
    That would tickle my fancy to fantasy? Another installment, I vote for. You so great at sending the message with few words which makes your writing more powerful.
    🙂
    M
    
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    May 8, 2017 at 3:46 pm Reply
    1. DanicaPiche
      
      I love your vote, thank you! Thanks also for the wonderful compliment. It means a lot to me, M. 🙂
      
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      May 8, 2017 at 4:04 pm Reply
mlbradford

Reading a Beautiful Life
u just KNOW there will b NO strife
No matter how she writes about light
Trust Danica to get it JUST RIGHT

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May 24, 2017 at 7:24 pm Reply
1. DanicaPiche
  
  Thank you! I always welcome your kind words and wonderful poetry! 🙂
  
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  May 24, 2017 at 7:26 pm Reply